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I of course must respect the privacy of my students, so I don't talk about them directly here, or much about what I do with them (and wouldn't even if I had the time!) but I think professional conduct allows me to say this:

Today we were doing a creative writing lesson on writing an action scene. I gave the students this for an example:

At the soft scrape of a bare foot on stone , Luisa whirled.

The Grey Man stood directly behind her, reaching for her throat. Luisa didn’t waste a second. She took one step forward, lifting her knee sharply. Her tensed foot snapped up. Too late! With the speed of a snake, the Grey Man caught her ankle and yanked.

Luisa went down hard, the gritty rock of the clifftop scraping her hands and knees raw. She tasted blood in her mouth and felt the sharp pain of a bitten tongue. With a monumental effort, she forced herself back to her feet. The Grey Man was waiting. Watching.

“Give me the stone,” he said, his voice soft and sibiliant. “The secret stone. Give it to me.”

Luisa risked a look over her shoulder. The ocean below was rough, the sharp rocks jagged teeth. And there were predators in the water.

But none of those were as dangerous as the creature that blocked her exit.

No safe way past him. The only way out was down.

With her heart pounding in her chest, thumping against the stone in her pocket, Luisa turned on her heel and fled. Towards the edge of the cliff.

She felt a tug at her hair, but she wrenched free and leapt. For a breathless moment, she felt suspended in air, flying past the startled gulls who screamed their displeasure.

Then, she fell.

"What happens next?" they wanted to know.

"You tell me!" I said merrily, and set them brainstorming, planning, and drafting.

I think Luisa dies in about half the stories. 14 year olds LOVE gore.

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Jun. 19th, 2013 10:42 am (UTC)
*cackles delightedly*
Jun. 23rd, 2013 03:44 pm (UTC)
This is DELIGHTFUL and makes me both want to write and to teach. Which is amazing. You rockstar.
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